"Though officially denied, in desperate need to turn the tide of war, rogue mercenary teams are called upon to finish the job that official armed forces couldn't." Thoughts on a better introductory line ofr Mercenaries of the Revolution?
Like it, but don't love it. Maybe it needs something more about the actual game play in it...about the stocks or even the players main goal? It just feels too short, I think.
Thanks for the input. I was thinking as I typed it that it needed something about the auctioning of the mercenary teams as well. I think it's a good opening sentence overall, but it will need more of an introduction paragraph I think.
Like it, but don't love it. Maybe it needs something more about the actual game play in it...about the stocks or even the players main goal? It just feels too short, I think.
ReplyDeleteThanks for the input. I was thinking as I typed it that it needed something about the auctioning of the mercenary teams as well. I think it's a good opening sentence overall, but it will need more of an introduction paragraph I think.
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